13C: January assessment learner response

1) Type up your feedback in full (you do not need to write mark/grade if you do not wish to).

WWW - There are some positives here: a clear opinion on the debate communicated and good understanding of Marxism and Pluralism 

EBI - Plenty we need to work on too...

- You don't introduce your case study in the intro, a basic error!

- You need far more examples ... and the ones you quote aren't all correct (the photo of the Syrian child on the beach was not citizen journalism, nor was ferguson).

- 2) Read through the mark scheme. Of the six different statements, write which you think is currently your strongest and which is weakest. Explain WHY and, for the weakest, what you are going to do to improve in that area.

My weakest point that I have is the ability to stay focused on the question. This is due to me wanting to put as much information about the subject at hand I forget what I am talking about originally which leads to me answering a question that was never even asked in the first place.


3) Read through the exemplar A grade essay. What does this essay offer that yours does not? Identify THREE things you can take from this essay to improve your own responses in future.

Having Key Stats about the case study that boosts their argument.
Contains key media theory
Well structured with punctuation and correct spelling

4) Write ONE new paragraph for your January assessment essay. Ideally, this should be a section you did not cover in your original essay. This paragraph needs to be comprehensive and meet the criteria for Level 4 of the mark scheme.

With New and Digital Media taking over everything with it becoming even more insightful with wide range of competing ideas and opinions from experts and journalists to bloggers and social networkers. But due to the fact that their is so many different opinions out there it has become even harder to find out who you can trust on the internet due to the quantity at the bottom which leads to the question does the internet provide a equal platform for everyone to have the chance to have their opinion heard.